En Garde!
Shiing! The swords slid apart with a metallic ring! I was completely concentrated on my goal. A small patch of flesh right above my dire enemy’s own heart. But this was no sitting duck I was fighting. This was Ryan Richards! The best under 14 fencer in San Diego! The boy, no the man, placed second in the nation at his tournaments. No one thought I could win, hey, I was only a rookie and he was a master of the blade! But I didn’t care. With the force on my side, I felt invincible! So, with a flick of my wrist, I sent his blade flying away, walked up and casually stabbed him in the chest, giving me the point I needed to win this match, and advance to the final round!
I think that the above is the best part of that I've written so far of my Personal Narrative. It is my lead in my story so it has ,(in my opinion), a pretty good hook. It draws you in because it fills you with excitement and you feel like you're there. And that is why I think that small excerpt is the best part of my Personal Narrative.
PS:so far.
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